Long Mountain is a small town that has a Long Mountain along the borders of Long Mountain. Long Mountain had never had a deadly storm before that's why non of the people at Long Mountain believed that there was gonna be a Deadly storm. The Reason to them not believing about the storms that was coming Long Mountain because, whenever a storm would head there way the Long Mountain around the boarders of their town would block cause of how high it is. Well one day as the town was having a nice glistened Sun upon them not realising about the Dark Miserable Black Cloud Coming there way. Mrs. Bubbles owns the famous Bakery in town where everyone goes for the amazing Scrambled Eggs with Bacon every morning. Well anyways Mr. Bubbles was sitting out of his shop and seen the Dark Miserable cloud and quickly thought to himself, "This cant be, our very first Deadly Storm". So Mr. bubbles went around warning everybody but they didn't believe so he decided if he blocked up his store then people will actually will come. So Mr. Bubbles went ad fenced up his store and said "If I were lying do you think I would be doing this?", then everyone realised the big Cloud above them and Quickly ran into Mr. Bubbles's Bakery to keep safe. 20 minutes later.... "Finally the Storm is over!" Mr. Bubbles said happily. After he had said that one of the men in the store stood up and said putting his head down, "We are sorry for not believing you" "That's ok maybe just next time believe me". After that one day everybody went home and settled down...
And they have lived happily ever after... The end.
Interesting idea for a story, I think I would like to live in a town with a massive mountain around it to protect it. I like that you have tried to use some descriptive language in here, but I feel that you could have described the storm in more detail, it is the climax of the story so you could describe the sound of the storm, what people see and feel in the bakery etc.
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